I like your character design and your narration. The sound quality needs a little improvement and the third act didn't look as good as the rest did and struck me as unfinished and the payoff wasn't for me although it was mitigated by the short run time of the cartoon.
I liked the "didn't explode out of his mouth...yet" angle. Just didn't grab me personally with that bit. but I really liked the way everything looked and moved and I'm keen to see more, I like your style!